Redraft Synopsis

Instead of the film opening with two characters (Benjy and Callum) discussing girls, the film now starts with a panning shot from the back of the classroom. This will give the impression of a full classroom. Callum admits to liking a girl in their class (Poppy) and Benjy makes it his mission to put them together. The next scene is the conference room (instead of the cinema). Benjy tells Callum he is going to train him how to get Poppy. Next there is a shot of a clock moving from 10:00am to 1:00pm and then a shot of a school bell ringing (as opposed to before which was a montage in the cinema) Benjy then says to Callum to say "how do you like your eggs? Fertalised" as a chat-up line. There is then a batman style "SLAP" title across the screen and it cuts to Callum rubbing a handprint on his face from where he had been slapped. Benjy then suggests a second chat up line which we don't hear him tell Callum. Benjy says "say..." then it immediatly cuts to Callum saying it. This chat-up line is equally cringeworthy and creppy and is "My friend and I bet you wouldn't take your shirt off in public". It cuts to Callum holding an ice pack between his legs. Benjy suggests a final chat-up line ("I put the STD in stud and all I need is U") and Callum decides against using it and instead aproaches the girl normally.

The girl agrees to go on a date with Callum and the date is seemingly going great until Callum goes to the bathroom. The door shuts revealing Benjy who tells Callum he has a plan. Callum tells Benjy to not do anything and that everything is going fine but Benjy ignores this and tells him to "wait until the bill arrives".

Callum spends the rest of the evening trying to avoid paying the bill by moving the subject away from the bill. When the bill finally arrives it is Benjy wearing a suit. He states that Callum asked him to ask her to marry him and pulls out a ring. Callum tries to explain he didn't say that but is interrupted by the girl saying yes. The scene quickly cuts to a wedding. Wedding bells can be heard before the fade to the new scene.

the guests at the wedding will be played by me and callum, cropped lots of times and pasted to make it look like the wedding is filled with guests.

credits begin to role up and it cuts back to the wedding where Benjy begins to say "when callum first asked me to be his best man" but is interrupted with callum shouting "I never asked you that!".